W.A.L.T Attempt Paragraphs
P} In the Holidays I went to Roturua When we got there we went
to this Motel called Havana Motel and my Nanny paid for it and there was a hot pool and the tempter was 38degrees. P} After my nanny paid for we went up stares to our room we opened the door and went inside the size of the T.V was a 38inc and 4 beds it was nice. Later on that day we went to the supermarket and got some food then we came back to the Motel and helped unpack the car after we asked if we could go for a swim and Nanny said yes so we went for a swim then we came back inside and had dinner then it was time for bed.
You have not got one main idea per paragraph. You might want to plan first to help you sort out your ideas. Mrs Larsen
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